Revision - Short Film Proposal

Here I improved on my grammar in this extract by including a comma after 'unfortunately'. I then wanted to use a more professional word rather than 'body' so I then changed it to 'physique' which also specifies exactly what I am talking about rather than just a human body.

I often found spelling mistakes, a lack of commas and also a lack of formal words so therefore I fixed these mistakes. At the beginning sentence of the second screenshot, you can see that the first sentence does not make clear sense. I eventually changed the sentence to ''Some of the female majority of the audience may either feel offended that women could also be potential abusers in a relationship, or that men are completely incapable of becoming victims; that it is in their nature to be the dominant and abusive partner in the relationship.'' This sentence makes more sense as it does not break up in full stops and commas, I have given an expanded explanation of the subject. Such as using less formal words such as 'it' I made the sentence longer.

Presentation Opening Lines

Good morning, my name is Yasmin Ally and I am here to present you with my short film proposal that aims to help increase awareness of domestic abuse towards men. 

Did you know that one in six men are victims in an abusive relationship? 

The reason as to why I am presenting about domestic abuse towards men is that it is often unrecognized and mocked by others, therefore I aim to increase viewer's awareness and knowledge of some of the most subtle signs that someone they know could be a victim of domestic abuse and the serious affect it could have.  

Short Film Proposal

Short film proposal from yl98

Presentation Good & Bad Opening Ideas

Good introductions to a presentation:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_mc1ckQGHpk

Why introduce yourself? Give a short detailed explanation about yourself.

Step 1: Give name and company

Step 2: Your value to people; what makes you unique and what can you do. (specialty & value)

Step 3: Who you can help. ‘’even if’’. Despite how bad the situation is; you are capable of helping it.

• Ask the audience questions/allow the audience to ask questions.
• Who are you?
• What is your topic?
• Why is it important?
• Start with relevant stories.
• Introduce yourself quickly.
• Explain how your topic can be useful to the audience and how they can benefit from listening.
• Show initiative.
• Give them issues to keep in mind.

Bad things/introductions to do in a presentation: 

- Divert from your objective.
- Lack enthusiasm when speaking.
- Drag the presentation out longer than you have to.
- Not being able to explain facts or unsure of what you are telling the audience.
- Talking too quietly.
- Talking too fast.
- Not giving the audience time to ask/respond to questions.
- Showing that you are unprepared.

Linguistic Register

A linguistic register is a range of language which is used for a particular purpose or in a particular setting. Linguistic register benefits the text in order for it to appear more professional and appropriate to the topic that is being discussed.This also helps the writer maintain their text to be formal as well as avoiding it becoming conversational.

My film might raise awareness about the conflict between men and women and how domestic abuse towards men can happen and the possible long term affects it has on men and also some reasons as to why men are not likely to report abuse than women. I want the audience feeling more aware and shocked that situations like this can happen towards men whether they are strong or not.

The continuous use of ‘’and’’ in the paragraph above makes the it become informal, as well as the repetitive use of informal language makes the paragraph appear to be conversational rather than professional. The paragraph also lacks punctuation which therefore makes the content become more difficult and incapable to read, as well as the lack of structure within the sentences; to give a broader explanation as to what point they are trying to express.   

My film will hopefully raise awareness towards the conflict between men and women and how domestic abuse against men can occur, the possible long term affects it has on men and also given reasons as to why men are less likely to report cases of domestic abuse than women. I would like the audience to become more aware and possibly shocked that situations like domestic abuse can happen towards men, despite their physique or status.

Presentation VIsuals

  Cover the basics:

- Enhanced resolution

- Standard size and appropriate theme; e.g lighting, contrast, suitable structure, colour.

- Non distorted.

  There are two features that can state whether a picture is a good image for a presentation:

  Image relevancy

  Does it strengthen the point/message of your slide?

  Image uniqueness

  Is the image attention grabbing towards your audience? 

           

Overused and generic images that are not relevant to the message you are trying to             portray can result in your audience becoming distracted. Images like this does not convey   a substantial message to your audience especially if they are irrelevant to your main point.

  Image relevancy

  

Presentation images are more than just an image to add to your slides as it is a visual representation of your message.

Effective presentations require a good setup and delivery - which include an appropriate positioning of the images which emphasise its relevance to the subject. This can be enhanced through the presenter's verbal communication or with a suitable quote, statement or title. 

  

  Does your approach support rich imagery?

Metaphors or analogies can benefit your presentation with more memorable visual options.

  Amount of content per slide

It is ideal that you express one of your points per slide, rather than trying to include all of your main content on to one page. Spread your ideas out on different slides and possibly use images more instead of text itself to create a message. Including images with your points on each slide could help the audience elaborate on the message you are trying to deliver.

  Image Uniqueness

Make sure your image is unique enough to:

- Stand out

- Draw attention from your audience

There are also two sections as to where a photo can become unique:

- The subject of the photo

- The structure of the photo

Subject of a photo

The focal point of an image is the subject of it.

The stock photo can become more unique in various different ways, such as:

'Tired' images - Instead of using generic photos, try and find something unique rather than overused photographs.

Unexpected application - Use more retro and playful photos instead of the standard business-orientated images. 

Realistic vs. fake - Many stock photos are clearly staged and 'perfect', try including realistic images that portray situations that the audience are more likely to have been in, allowing them to relate to your slides.

Exaggeration - Exaggeration in your slides can be useful when emphasizing main points, however too much exaggeration can be considered as tacky. 

Focus on people - The audience will most likely respond more to images with actual people on them.

Telling a story - A range of images can convey a strong message that your audience could possible relate to.

Evoke emotions - Photos can also be used to provoke emotions from an audience, which is another effective way of connecting with them emotionally and gathering some form of an active response from them. 

Humour - Using humorous images is another way of relating to your audience.

Composition - A stock photo can be made more unique through composition techniques.

Asymmetry - Amateur photographers make sure that their photos are centred. Asymmetrical photos are most likely to come from the rule of thirds.

Empty space - All of the space within a slide does not have to be filled, having a clear and empty space can create a nice contrast with the rest of the image. 

Point of view - Photographers can grab the audience's attention by capturing images from different views and angles, even with the most simplest every day scenes.

Perspective - Photographers can also add dramatic depth and distance to their images.

Cropping - Some images can become more attractive by being cropped to make the subject look more closer, rather than photographing in a standard view.

Background - By putting images onto a white background it will contrast effectively and make the image stand out more. 

Focus or depth of field - Focusing on a key part of an image and blurring out the rest of the content behind it will emphasize its significance.

Framing - Adding images in the foreground will make the main image more unique. 

Action or motion - Capturing movement will add an energetic affect to your slide.

Repetition - Showing repetition in your slides will catch the audience's attention and will highlight the point you are trying to express

Colour - Including colour in your slides will exaggerate the tone and mood of your subject, and also to indicate which topic you are on. 

Improving your presentation - homework

10 tips on how to improve your presentation

Presentation

-          The teacher was not enthusiastic towards the content he was teaching.

-          His voice and facial expressions implied that he did not want to be there.

-          Cannot see the screen properly (small text and lighting).

-          Does not know the content he is teaching.

-          Volume of information given per slide.

-          Have not rehearsed the information.

-          Monotone

Teachers should do a walk-through of the script

Confidence/style of expression

Off topic/ on topic

Make your presentation into a story

Interesting ways of relating a presentation to its audience

Referring presentations to shapes

Tell the audience what is and what could be

Motivating the audience

Beginning, middle and end (structure)

Do not talk all the time, include other pictures and videos

Laughing, clapping

Enthusiasm

Create unforgettable moments

Personal stories

Quoting others

Repetition of key words

Metaphorical and visual words

Fundamental information that relates the audience together

Creating a piece of music in the presentation (rhythm)

Musical/poetical references

      Audience: likeable here, encounters roadblocks, emerges transformed

Index

Handout Task

Combination Task:

- Identifying handouts

- Reading a written source and extracting information

- Obtaining information from a handout

When reading this handout I will skim and scan read the text with concentration. I will also label and highlight particular words and phrases that are relevant and expand on them.I will look for particular subheadings/titles and try to extract information from that point that relates to my relevant topic. 

In my given handout, I have highlighted key headings that give explanations and examples as to what abuse cannot be caused by and the main reasons as to why domestic abuse occurs. 

Reading effectively

 - Read where friends, music, noise etc. will not be distracting.
 - Read when you are alert.
 - Limit reading sessions to realistic amounts of time/pages.
 - Switch back and forth from reading to other study activities or tasks.
 - Preview the text before reading so you can prepare yourself.
 - Turn chapter headings/subheadings into questions. Then search for answers. 
 - Mark text information that answers the questions. Be an active reader.
 - Pause frequently to summarize/restate ideas. Use your own words.
 - Have specific questions about a topic.
 - Have a set of reading goals; take notes to help you understand in case you want to refer    back to them.
 - Identify your reading objectives. It will be more useful to have some understanding of          what you are looking for and what you want to find.
 - Search for bolded terms. This can help you identify key information. 
 - Have a dictionary nearby. You will be able to define any words you are unsure of and          you can then make notes.

Annotating - Prezi

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Evaluation on Annotation

Evaluate how different annotation techniques worked with differing degrees of effectiveness for extracting different sorts of information.

Annotation process:

1.      Highlighting

2.      Underlining

3.      Labeling

Highlighting is effective when you need to pick out specific words or phrases in a passage that are relevant to you.

Underlining is beneficial when you identify key words that relate to the subject you are finding information for.

Labeling is useful when you want to make notes on certain words and expand on its meaning by adding extra information and linking it to your relevant subject.

Online Journal Screenshot

This journal shows the affects and links between domestic violence and suicidal attempts in both men and women and how domestic abuse is a high risk health factor. This is beneficial to the topic I am researching as it provides me with the health effects domestic violence can bring upon those in abusive relationship.

Oxford Journals, http://services.oxfordjournals.org/cgi/searchresults?fulltext=domestic+violence+towards+men&simple_search_submit=Search, accessed 21st September 2015. 

Annotating

 Highlighting:

-          Focusing on one specific piece of information.

Annotating:

-          An expanded definition of a certain phrases or words from a piece of text.

-          Technique used to extract information.

-          Forming an understanding about what has been written.

-          Evaluating the accuracy of the information.

-          Making connections between pieces of research and editing your decisions for                      further research.

-          Using labels, lines, or asterisks can help when making notes.

-          Make notes in margin or on a separate paper.

Annotation is about interacting with the text.

-          Record opinions next to the passage.

-          Locate key passages.

-          Connect different sections of the passages together; shows full understanding of text.

-          Record relevant connections if you have experienced them in your life.

-          If unsure of certain words, do not use them. Search for the correct definition as soon            as you can.

-          Track themes; linking themes will help you understand the text more thoroughly.

-          Identify messages the article is portraying.

What I need to find in my area of abuse

-          Statistics on domestic abuse against men in UK and USA

-          Awareness (US & UK)-

-          Frequency

-          Solutions

''12 organisations offer refuge or safe house provision for male victims in the UK - a total of 63 spaces, of which 17 are dedicated to male DV victims only (the rest being for victims of either gender).''

-       Age

http://www.mankind.org.uk/pdfs/30%20Key%20Facts%20-%20Male%20Victims%20(April%202015).pdf


''Men don't leave abusive relationships for various reasons – the top five being: concern about the children (89%), marriage for life (81%), love (71%), the fear of never seeing their children again (68%) and thinks she'll change (56%).''

Man Kind, http://www.mankind.org.uk/pdfs/30%20Key%20Facts%20-%20Male%20Victims%20(April%202015).pdf, accessed 18th September 2015.

Summarising

When you summarise, you rearrange the text you have just read and then combine them into your own words in order to make it more simple for yourself and other readers to understand. Summarising is useful when gathering research.

By summarising, you will enable yourself to understand the content more by rereading and will expand your ability to identify and pick out key information.
To summarise, you must:

• Read the text in order to get a thorough idea what it is about. 
• highlight main information that is useful to your summary

In order to summarise, you have to:

•  be certain that the information you are interpreting are accurate. 
• not include additional information outside of the website.
• if you use exact words from the text, make sure you quote/reference the source and author.
• make sure the reader is aware that the content is not yours.

Summary of this article

In this article, Jeremy Corbyn is said to have been disloyal to the nation as he refused to sing the national anthem at a Battle of Britain remembrance memorial. Tory and Labour MP's named him ''dishonorable'' whereas Jeremy Corbyn claimed he stood in respectful silence. In this article, the author targets much negativity towards Corbyn.

Key word search

In order to find some statistics to support my research, I used a word search by entering ''domestic violence statistics male vs female'' which enables me to compare the results between genders, also allowing me to find evidence to support my research into domestic violence towards men being unnoticed. With this information I can help create awareness by showing the difference in men that report abuse and men that do not. This will hopefully beat the stereotype of men not being capable of being abused and will draw more attention to the likeliness of men being the victim.

Costs of production

                                         

Budgeting

When budgeting a short film, there is a large degree of give and take. The first time you budget, you should include everything that feels 'essential' - some of which you will have to pay for and some of which you will get for free. The budget will be a constantly changing document, insomuch as ‘essentials’ become redefined, amazing deals come up and certain elements prove to be too expensive. Of course, there comes a point, when you have raised all the cash and made all the deals that you possibly can, when you have to decide to go-ahead with what you already have.

Elements that you should include in your budget are:

• Cast and Crew - you might not have to pay anyone, but make sure you clarify this early on.      If you are not paying crew then it is customary to offer to cover their expenses. Note - funded films generally require the equity minimum pay for cast and particularly crew.
• Travel – an unavoidable cost.
• Catering – food is not to be underestimated, if you can feed your team well they will be much happier to work for you.
• Location - it depends where you are shooting, but again make sure that this is thoroughly researched ahead of time.
• Camera and Lights - see Filmmaking Guide: Equipment.
• Filmmaking Guide: Equipment.
• Insurance - see Legal Guide: Insurance.
• Post-production and Marketing - important areas, most first-time filmmakers do not budget adequately for these. See also our related filmmaking guides: Post-production & Editing,Press & Publicity Materials, Marketing Your Short.

To find out what would be the required costs when creating a short film, I skim read this section (Budgeting) in order to get a general idea of what costs would have to be covered. 

BBC Films, http://www.bbc.co.uk/filmnetwork/filmmaking/guide/production/budget-and-schedule#budget, accessed: 16th September 2015 

Scanning - Abuse

I have researched into child abuse & neglect and domestic abuse in relationships (men and women)

The Guardian, http://www.theguardian.com/society/2009/nov/27/patrick-stewart-domestic-violence, accessed 12th September 2015.

Here is my first screenshot. I was scanning for facts for the effect on relatives who have witnessed domestic abuse, to which I came across statistics in the 3^rd paragraph on this screenshot. This piece of information will be useful when I compare the statistics and responses between domestic abuse against men and women. I quickly found this information by scanning the page for specific key words such as ‘’experience’’, ‘’women’’ and also figures.

The Guardian, http://www.theguardian.com/commentisfree/2011/jun/07/feminism-domestic-violence-men, accessed 12th September 2015.

My second screenshot, also taken from the guardian, was taken as it raises concern as to the increase in women who have been convicted of abuse. Like my previous screenshot, I scanned the page for specific words finding within the first couple of paragraphs the reasons why abuse towards men is not as taken serious as the abuse towards women.

Parental Alienation Awareness Organisation, http://www.paawareness.org/, accessed 14th September 2015.

I have chosen to research into child neglect and its effects in order to provide me with more information supporting my other research into domestic abuse in relationships, regardless of gender. I scan read this page for key words such as ‘’behaviours’’,’ cause’’ and also ‘’affect/effect’’.

Phrase Search

I have phrase searched ''domestic abuse against men'' in Google Books, then I came upon this book.

It provides readers with steps in order to try and prevent any abuse or conflict within a relationship. This could benefit my research for my topic as it provides me with a possible solution on how both men and women can prevent abuse. 

Neglect and Abuse

1.    Google ‘‘Neglect NSPCC’’ Click on the blue button link ‘‘Read more about neglect’’. Scan read the web page for:

a.    Children’s needs

b.    Kinds of neglect

Types of neglect

Physical neglect
failing to provide for a child’s basic needs such as food, clothing or shelter. Failing to adequately supervise a child, or provide for their safety.

Educational neglect
failing to ensure a child receives an education.

Emotional neglect
failing to meet a child’s needs for nurture and stimulation, perhaps by ignoring, humiliating, intimidating or isolating them. It’s often the most difficult to prove.

Medical neglect
failing to provide appropriate health care, including dental care and refusal of care or ignoring medical recommendations.

Defining a child's needs

Basic physical care: Warmth, shelter, adequate food and rest, grooming (hygiene) and protection from danger.

Affection: Which includes physical contact, holding, stroking, cuddling and kissing, comforting, admiration, delight, tenderness, patience, time, making allowances for annoying behaviour, and general companionship and approval.

Security: Continuity of care, the expectation of continuing in the stable family unit, a predictable environment, consistent patterns of care and daily routine, simple rules and consistent controls and a harmonious family group.

Guidance and control: To teach adequate social behaviour which includes discipline within the child's understanding and capacity and which requires patience and a model for the child to copy, for example in honesty and concern and kindness for others.

Responsibility: For small things at first such as self-care, tidying playthings or taking dishes to the kitchen and gradually elaborating the decision making that the child has to learn in order to function adequately, gaining experience through his/her mistakes as well as his/her stresses and receiving praise and encouragement to strive to do better.

Independence: To make his/her own decisions first about small things but increasingly about the various aspects of his/her own life within the confines of the family and society's codes. Parents use fine judgement in encouraging independence and in letting the child see and feel the outcome of his or her own capacity. Protection is needed, but over-protection is as bad as responsibility and independence too early.

 Stimulation and innate potential: By praise and encouragement; curiosity and exploratory behaviour. By developing skills though responsiveness to questions and to play, by promoting educational opportunities.

http://www.nspcc.org.uk/preventing-abuse/child-abuse-and-neglect/neglect/what-is-neglect/

2. Google ‘‘Domestic violence the facts Refuge’’. Scan the web page for:

A. statistics relating to the likelihood of being a female victim of domestic violence in the UK

B. statistics relating to the likelihood of being a young victim of domestic violence in the UK

1 in 4 women in England and Wales will experience domestic violence in their lifetimes and 8% will suffer domestic violence in any given year.

25% of children in the UK have been exposed to domestic abuse (Radford et al. NSPCC, 2011)

3. Google ‘‘statistical bulletin alcohol related deaths’’ and click on the National Statistics PDF link. Scan the PDF for:

a. the three UK regions with the lowest average alcohol-related death rates for females (period 2004-2013)

b. the three UK regions with the highest average number of alcohol-related male deaths (period 2004-2013)